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  1. Jim

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    At Peterborough show last week Brian (Mons)I suggested a short video explaining our new product (the LED Tyre Pressure Alarm) would be good on our stand, I agreed but the thought of a JML style video playing all day filled me with horror and anyway making one is beyond my capability. Then over the weekend I thought that a silent powerpoint slide show might work. Well I've not used powerpoint much but I've had a play and come up with this, a first draft, it will be played on a 17inch screen on the stand. It runs for 3 minutes or so and will loop.

    Please take a look and let me know what you think. I'm thick skinned so don't sit of the fence :Smile: I'd like to hone it into a slick sales pitch before I go to Carmarthen on Thursday. Thanks

    [ame]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jGn4nYF-A8A[/ame]
     
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  2. Popeye

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    I've watched it twice now Jim.

    1. It wouldn't get on your nerves playing in the background all day.

    2. It covers every question I asked when you first launched it.

    The real trick with power-point is NOT to use too many of the available transitions. I think it is good. I will also want two sets of six next week end in Carmarthen.

    Griff
     
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    very good jim ? tells everything what you need to about the product :thumb::thumb::thumb::thumb::thumb::thumb: dogmanlpool
     
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    Very professional Jim, well done !!!:thumb:
     
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    Second slide, fourth bullet point - "Adds" should be "Add".

    Graham the picky proofreader :Laughing:
     
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    Hi Jim,
    I use powerpoint a lot and I think you've done a brilliant job!:BigGrin:

    My only slight concern with the product is that if you have parked up somewhere, particularly at night, and the LED starts to flash, are you going to attract some undesirables poking around to see what it is?:Sad:

    Or in some parts of the world it might even attract the bomb squad!:Eeek:
     
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    Good points, so it provides even more incentive to keep your tyre pressures correct. :thumb:
     
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    It seems to me that it gives relevant information in a positive and non- fussy way.
    I think the silence is important for you, I know how irritating a constantly repeating soundtrack may be. On the other hand sound is a powerful attraction to customers who may only hear it once and it can have usefull associations for marketing. Could you have a soundtrack with the capacity to mute when you're on the edge of insanity.
    I think it would persuade me to buy some. I'll see you at a show.
     
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    Looks good Jim.

    Just one thought Should the slide "Just screws onto your valve cap" say either "Just screws onto your valve" or "Replaces your valve cap".
     
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    Jim, just another thought, your Sponsored Link add on the top right of Fun, not sure if you are just using that on this site or elsewhere too, if elsewhere, where viewers may not know of your new venture, I would add the word `Tyre`.

    At a glance "LED Pressure Alarm" even with the graphic, does not make it obvious what it is.

    Steve
     
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    Nice presentation Jim, just one small point if I'm being really pedantic, at 1min 26 secs in it says "screws onto valve cap", I think that should read valve stem.

    Tony
     
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    Hate to differ Graham, but I think it is correct.

    Under inflated tyres.........Adds £££ to your fuel bill.

    Griff:thumb:


    ps. you are beginning to wish you hadn't asked aren't you Jim?
     
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    For me, the first slide should have the BIG tyre getting bigger


    You have it getting smaller, which is confusing
     
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    Tyres get smaller. If you turn your sound up you can hear the air escaping. its getting smaller:Smile:
     
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    There should be one more page.....
    Ideal gift!
    Jane :BigGrin:
     
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    I think its excellent.

    Reminds me to fit the ones I bought as well:Doh:
     
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    Looks excellent to me..

    My only thought is to possibly change the wording ofn the 4th(?) slide to a question. "Can you tell which of these tyres is 8lbs low just be looking?"

    Just my ten penneth:thumb:
     
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    Sorry don't like it.

    I think it lacks music, you know the cheesy sort that plays in lifts....

    Anyway, here's my version as the new self promoted Director.

    Certificate 18-

    First things first... Dancing girls? where are they?

    It should have at least 4 Dancing girls in bikinis on a beach in say Hawaii.
    As they dance one should suggest a nice drive to pick up middle aged men for unconditional love making.

    However,

    The silly one, (blonde girl) looks at tyres and says to her friends "there fine" lets go.... Sadly she never makes it to middle aged man as she suffers a blow out, causing tail backs right across the island. Middle aged man can not wait anymore and walks away distraught and hits the pub before returning to his miserable moaning wife.

    Q Scene 2,,,

    Here's what could of happened,
    Same scene, yet this time, she has the Jimbo tyre pressure thingy... she looks at the tyres, instantly see's them flashing....OMG Chardonnay quick blow in to the tyres, of which a seductive Chardonnay does, re-inflating tyres... Then off they drive, and meet middle aged man for ----

    wait, Q Scene 3,
    Pornography, yep hard core pornography,, that stuff can sell anything, as they arrive to the middleaged man and get busy, Letitia, looks straight at the camera, and says,,,

    Thanks to that wonderful product we survived....



    Ok---

    So cast members are required.

    As there is a distinct lack of middle aged men on this forum, That part should be played by me.
    So we just need some Bikini clad young women and a sports car now, and give me a shout, Ill be round for filming...

    That should get a few sold. :thumb::thumb:
     
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    Spells out the benefits in a logical way........the first question I asked myself is "So how do I know what my proper tyre pressure should be ?"

    This is beyond your sales pitch..but you might be able to help with this on your site.......even by giving advice where to go to get this key info.

    Its a good product.......clever .........well done.
    As a business its great....highish value.....small size....perfect for stock keeping.

    Good luck Jim


    barry
     
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